I think that the story is bad because he used some words in a bad context, verbs and nouns that have got another mean and he hardly used linkers.
The night was very dark. It was raining a lot when I witnessed a terrible scene. A man was killing a girl! I saw the face of the killer and I (had good luck) was lucky he didn´t see me.
The next day I couldn´t stop (to think) thinking, so I decided to go to the police station, I told a police officer the entire story and I described the killer. The police was looking for the killer for a lot of time but he didn´t appear, thanks to his intelligence he could (to )hide, but finally the police caught him the week after.
Now I am happy because the killer is in (the) prison and everybody in the town congratulated me.
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Not bad Alex, but I think that there is still something missing there. How did you feel when you saw that terrible event? Is it very common that you walk along a street and you see a murder? What about the girl, did you do anything to help her? did you call for an ambulance? .....
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